It was a hot sunny day and today was the dance. I come to school with my blue jeans and green shirt. Butterflies where flying in my stomach as I thought of that special person I was eager to dance with. As I walked closer to school and thinking to myself what if she says no or what if she says yes?, how do I slow dance?, what if I throw-up? More and more I thought I walked closer to school. As I walked on the first floor going to my locker the girl I wanted to dance with before my confused eyes. As she looked right at me her dark brown eyes shimmered and glistened at me. I shook out her hypnotizing eyes glued in my brain. I got my school supplies and tucked my backpack in my crammed untidy locker. I slowly approached her and said shyly to her " Hi" She responded with no response only silence. I could tell she was excited about the dance because she was talking to on one of her friends about who she was going to dance with. i already knew that I had a twenty-five percent chance that she would dance with me. I also knew that she was planing to dance with one of guy friends that she really likes. I am always jealous of him because he likes her too but I also think that he also likes other girls too. But that was my evil opinion. For the next three hours of gossip, giggles and romance filled the air every corner I turned I ether smelled the overwhelming Axe spray through the halls and the bitter taste of women perfume. It was almost time for the dance but all classes in the school had to go to there period one class to receive a candy gram. Surprisingly I got a candy gram it said on it " Happy Valentines day. From: ?" That letter made me anxious, curious and outraged. Who would give me one? So I asked her if she wrote this to me. She responded with a " NO!" I was shocked and confused at the same time. But I couldn't let that down. Fifteen minutes later..... It was finally the dance. The gymnasium was decorate with red and pink hearts, X's and O's cut outs and other neat Valentine themed masterpieces. I casually started dancing with my friend Francis and Tommy. Then after that I needed to sit down for a while. As I sat on the solid hard wooden gymnasium bench I thought what I should do next. I suddenly caught a glimpse at her. She wore a striped black and grey shirt that matched her shiny silky hair. I thought in my head of how she would sit beside me or even say something to me but none of that came true. By twentieth song was an slow dance my stomach started to create billions of butterflies and my heart started to beat harder. I talked to one of my friends and before my eyes she put her hand out toward me. I responded and grabbed it immediately. She danced with me for about forty seconds then she said " you suck at dancing!" she left me with no response from me.It felt like one thousand billion sharp metal knives stabbing me all over. I felt so sick and depressed. I returned to my seat and walked around for a bit. Then fifteen songs later I was going to return to the bench and I saw her and him slow dancing together. I felt like the smallest person in the whole entire world because I was just going to ask her. I knew that I wasn't worth it. I felt like crouching in a corner and cry my disappointment. After the dance she tried to talk to me and straighten thing out but I declined it. I knew she just wanted to befriend me. I know that my friends said things that she likes me but when I saw her with him she looked so happy. Hey at least she is happy. I still think that she is pretty, I don't hate her but I accept it. I sometimes think " wow wouldn't it be nice if she liked me and danced with me?" But that was Valentines Day. There is two options that involve the hearts, chocolates.
I got none of that I got the angry, horrible experience and sadness. I still wonder to this day of who gave me that candy gram....
My goodness this is amazing, i totally got the feeling i even felt sad after im amazed by the detail and how you made me feel inside the story, maybe throw it through a spell check but other than amzing absouletly amazing.
ReplyDeleteVery nice. a billion sharp knives stabbing you? harsh sounds emo........ Very good story..... it was a story?
ReplyDeleteok for starters you mispelled if it is not fi and you mispelled day it is not dy but good work.
ReplyDeleteokay gamerdude12. He made like 2 mistakes but really this was an awesome story his senses were unbelievably awesome and great and he made the whole story flowed. Tanzinite12- im sorry that she didnt dance with you and you guys didnt do what you wanted to but a person will come along and she will feel the same way about you and you will feel the same way about her. :) i loved your story again :))))
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